(All opinions and statements in this post are my own opinions and do not necessarily reflect those of Aspen Mountain Press. Yell at me, if you wish.)

I keep hearing a statement from aspiring authors that absolutely makes me shudder. There seems to be a belief that spelling and grammar issues are solely the job of editors and don’t need to be worried about by the authors.

It’s true that, when the rubber hits the road, we editors are responsible for correcting spelling and grammar issues. But failure to make your work the cleanest and best it can be possible before you submit it may mean you never reach that point. The editor (or agent) may never even request a full because their appreciation of your story may not be enough to balance the costs and resources needed to get it through the publication process.

The first thing aspiring authors have to understand is that your submission – be it synopsis, partial or full – is your interview for a contract. It’s what you will be judged on. Why would you choose to make less than the best impression you possibly could? Would you show up to interview for a modeling shot with grimy hair and say that’s the hairdresser’s job? Shooting yourself in the foot is not a great start to any venture.

Now, keep in mind that almost every submission contains some errors, that’s normal and expected. But a plethora of easy to find and fix ones tells me (accurately or not) that the author doesn’t care enough to do the very best job possible. That it’s not important to the author. Are they lazy? Are they going to be difficult to work with?

Another thing it tells me is that if I contract this work, it will cost my house more money to get it in shape for publishing than it would an equivalent story that is cleaned up and corrected. The longer I have to spend on it, the longer my line editors or proofers have to spend on it, the more it costs. Publishing is still a business and it’s part of my job to make the best use of my house’s resources as I can.

It also directly affects my ability to appreciate and enjoy the story. Like it or not, each time I see an error, it drags me out of the story and breaks my immersion. Too many times and I can’t follow the story very well and end up not liking it as much as I possibly could have. You don’t want to let mechanical errors get in the way of the story.

I want to strongly encourage anyone who submits a work for publication to utilize the marvels of spellcheck and the eagle eyes of a test reader or critique partner. Make your submission as clean and correct as you possibly can before you submit it and you will increase your chances of acceptance.

Title: Devon Falls: Red Hot Magic Authors: Raine Delight Artist: Skylar Sinclair ISBN: 978-1-60168-086-0 Genre: Contemporary Erotic Paranormal Publisher: Aspen Mountain Press Publication Date: 02/8/2008 Sexual Content: Erotic

With the help of a charity fundraiser, Jenna sets her friend, Raven, up to find Mr. Perfect. Raven though, has found Mr. Perfect…in her dreams. Now, if she could only find the sexy man in real life.

Click here to read an excerpt.

Title: Del Fantasma: Silk Panties Authors: Celia Kyle Artist: Nikita Gordyn ISBN: 978-1-60168-084-6 Genre: Contemporary Paranormal Publisher: Aspen Mountain Press Publication Date: 02/1/2008 Sexual Content: Erotic Contemporary Paranormal

Lisa Bradenton is breaking out of her shell. What better way to take a walk on the wild-one-night- stand-side than a visit to the infamous Del Fantasma? At the urging of her friends, Lisa goes to the bar with the hopes of finding a lover to take her mind off her ex-boyfriend. Soon after walking through the doors she’s overwhelmed by the sexy bartender who has a quick smile, sexy eyes and deep rumbling voice. He is definitely one-night stand material. Definitely.

Jonathan and his inner beast crave the sexy, sultry and curvy siren’s touch. A smile and good conversation aren’t enough for him. Even after he’s gotten her in his bed, he still craves everything about the seductress. Her looks reeled him in, but her uncertainty and open nature snare him forever. But after one night of bliss, she disappears. What the hell is he supposed to do now? Lisa is his mate and without her, he’s lost.

Click here to read an excerpt.

The last several manuscripts I’ve edited have suffered from what I call the “Laundry List Syndrome” so I thought I’d take a moment to mention it here.

A laundry list is when an author tries to mention a whole lot of things at once instead of dribbling them in a little at a time. In some cases it appears as part of an info-dump but sometimes it just appears out of the blue.

As an example, here’s a laundry list:

The stranger turned around and she couldn’t believe her eyes: black hair, blue eyes, a strong chin, a nose with a slight crook to the side and tanned cheeks dusted with a dark five o’clock shadow.

The author in this laundry list is merely dumping out facts. It’s dry and the reader tends to just skim over it.

It would be much more effective to give each of these facts individual emphasis. It makes it more enjoyable to read and more memorable as well.

Try this in contrast:

The dark haired stranger turned around and she couldn’t believe her eyes. His glossy black hair curled around his tanned face in waves that made her fingers itch to smooth it back. Piercing cobalt eyes were framed by lush black lashes, the darkness echoed in the hint of razor stubble dusting his strong chin. Only the slight bump and crooked slant of a long-ago broken nose saved his face from being too pretty.

I’d usually space it out more than that and I realize it’s not the best paragraph ever, but look how much more memorable it is than the laundry list?

One magic clue to an imminent laundry list is using a colon… If you find yourself using a colon, ask yourself why and if there is a better way to present the information you are about to list.

This is the first in an intermittent series of posts I hope will be useful to the authors and prospective authors out there but also an interesting insight into the things editors (or at least THIS editor) notices in manuscripts and submissions.

Today I’d like to talk about the order in which events happen. The main mantra of any series of events is Action THEN Reaction.

In order to jump away from a threat, the threat has to exist. It doesn’t make much sense for a person to leap backward first, then for the speeding car to turn the corner and veer toward where they had been. (Well, not for anything other than a paranormal story, perhaps).

Readers notice these issues. Sometimes consciously but sometimes all they will be able to tell you is the scene seemed odd or mixed up.

But there’s a deeper sequence within reaction. Some reactions normally happen faster than others. Sub-conscious or instinctive reactions will always take precedence over conscious reactions.

Think about what happens when:

Action:
- Put your hand down on a hot stove.

Reactions:
- Snatch hand back
- Clutch or wave hand to try to stop the pain
- Yell “OUCH” (or bad words of choice)
- Put hand under cold water

So if you look at what the reactions are, you can see the most instinctive reaction is first — the reaction to a pain stimulus. Then an only slightly less deep-seated reaction to ease the pain. Then comes the more conscious ones, ending with the most conscious one which is to remember what to do about the pain as far as first aid.

A trick to figuring out if you have events in the correct order is to sort of picture the scene in your mind and walk through what would happen, sort the reactions in order of instinct, then write it that way.

If a character hits the wall hard enough to lose his breath, you shouldn’t have the character impact the wall, then the character say something (other than “oof”), then say he has his breath knocked out of him and grunts. If you impact the wall, the first instinctive reaction and one that is out of the character’s control is to lose his breath. A conscious thought to say something wouldn’t be able to happen in there.

It’s also important to remember that readers like to have discrete actions in sequence rather than many actions happening at once. I’ll talk more about that later, though.

Action THEN Reaction in the correct order will help readers to follow your story the way you intended.

Feedback is welcome and feel free to suggest things you’d like to see in this blog series.